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i dream by =leficia:iconleficia:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


In the dark
on the train
in a book or
in the rain

i find myself
inexplicably
finding you
a shadow of you
a profile of you
a portion of you

and i think
or rather i feel
that something went wrong
the past is not right
things are not as they are

in my dreams

where once you kissed me
now you just hold me

and that is my dream
that crazy-wild dream

where a touch is a dream
and i dream of a touch
or a word, or a look, or my name

on your lips

sometimes i think
(or rather, i feel)
that if we had tried
and if we had failed
that still would be better than this

i would not be stuck
where i dream of a touch
if we had – just once – shared a kiss.
©2006-2009 =leficia
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again with the angsty poetry without a solid rhythm or rhyme from go to woah. what's the deal? geez. i have some similar things back in my gallery. same thing, but another year gone. so. um. it's 11pm, which is no later than any other bedtime i've had since friday, almost a week ago. and no sleep-ins! that's my reasoning behind the way this came out.

edit: if anyone cares, i thought i better explain somewhat.
it's a love poem. duh. i am (or was? i don't even know anymore) desperately, totally, hopelessly in "love" with someone. back in the day i'd write these emotion-filled poems about how i wished it'd work out with me and him. now, i think, i don't know, i think i think that i'm still in love, but i've totally written it off as hopeless. so i'm kind of commenting on how i am now, where i go for days, weeks, without thinking about him, then bang! i miss him, want him, so much, i can't even explain it properly.

i think i just made it more confusing.
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=leficia:iconleficia: Dec 13, 2006, 11:56:49 AM
heheh. hey, let me have a look at this again... i remember writing it, but i can't remember what i wrote... :P

--
in love with Love
(God is Love)
~Lerianna:iconLerianna: Dec 13, 2006, 6:33:36 PM
hey, i really like it and i love the rhyme scheme! that's something I'd definitely want to try some time myself!

--
Breathe-in experience,
breathe-out poetry.
--Muriel Rukeyser
=leficia:iconleficia: Dec 13, 2006, 9:34:42 PM
i'd nutted out the first four lines and had them running through my head for about ten minutes. the rest is just rambling - i checked it as i went, but there is practically no forethought or editing. :P

--
in love with Love
(God is Love)
~Lerianna:iconLerianna: Dec 14, 2006, 5:26:09 PM
Well you did an awesome job! :D

--
Breathe-in experience,
breathe-out poetry.
--Muriel Rukeyser
=leficia:iconleficia: Dec 15, 2006, 1:05:29 AM
yay!

--
in love with Love
(God is Love)
~Lyrewolf:iconLyrewolf: Dec 23, 2006, 5:36:41 PM
where a touch is a dream
and i dream of a touch
or a word, or a look, or my name

i love that part. The rhythm, and the way the words sound in my head, and the space between that and on your lips ... *has no idea how to finish*

It's awesome, anyway.

--
"Gerd, do the Khoogras bury their dead?"
"Hell no, they eat them. But you have to give them this--they cook them first."

Welcome to Entropy Burgers! May I take your order?
=leficia:iconleficia: Dec 25, 2006, 11:37:21 PM
thankee so much!

--
in love with Love
(God is Love)
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